Peer Edits- Editorial

1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
Yes, she does not like that the gate between the upper and lower parking lots is closed.

2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
Yes, the problem is that the closed gate has caused more traffic and accidents, while the solution is to open the gate to let students go through.

3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
Yes, she said that the school closed the gate because they wanted to lessen traffic and lessen the number of accidents that happen in the morning and afternoons.You can probably add a little more to this, was there a speific incident that caused the administration to close the gate?

4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
It is an article that would be interesting to most Eastview students because it affects them all. No student wants to deal with the long lines that are always at the turning lights--it's annoying.

5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
The first paragraph states the problem and what the administration was trying to do, and the second paragraph talks about the specific impacts that closing the gate has had on students as a whole.

6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
Yes, the paragraphs work together well.

7. Is the writing clear?
For the most part, however there are some parts that I was confused in. In the second paragraph, the part about possibly closing a right lane so people can turn was confusing--which street are you talking about? Johnny Cake?
Also, are there any other impacts on the closed gate? How have accidents gone up? On average, how late are students now because of this? Has is caused any good things to happen?



1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
Yes, she thinks car manufacturers need to be more careful with the cars they produce

2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
Yes, the problem is that car makers have been making cars forever, but they do not necessarily know how safe the cars are. Solutions are that the country needs to have more sanctions or guidelines/regulations.

3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
Not really, there have not been many counter arguments on this topic, so they are probably hard to find.

4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
Yes, mainly because it is a topic that relates to most people in the US because driving is pretty common. The topic of car recalls has also been a big deal in the past few months, so people are interested in it.

5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
Yes, she first states the problem and then goes into the solutions.

6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
Yes, they all work together.

7. Is the writing clear?
Yeah, the idea is developed well. It makes sense, and her view of the problem is very clear.